By
Charlene Raddon
Researching
a book involves a lot of reading, in books, online, at a library. Research
involves fact-checking and the verification of numerous details. Often writers,
especially those who write historicals, get so wrapped up with the bigger facts,
they forget about the little details.
Do oak trees grow in Wyoming? If so, what
kind are they? Towering? Stately? Or the scrubby kind, more like bushes? How is
the town in the story laid out? What about the house? Do you know how many closets
the house has? How many bathrooms?
These
seem like very minor points, but often it is the tiny details that add realism
to a story and bring it alive.
Here
is the opening paragraph of Lucia St. Clair Robson’s book Ride The Wind, one of the best I’ve ever read.
A rolling sea of deep grass flecked with
a foam of primroses washed up on islands of towering oaks and pecans and
walnuts. The pale blue sky was fading at the edges as the sun heated up the
day. Soon it would be hot enough for the children to sneak down to the nearby
Navasota River to splash in the cook, shaded waters. The warm East Texas wind
blew through the stockade door, bringing company with it. It was a morning in
May; a time of sunshine and peace, an open gate and Indians.
Note
the author didn’t write “a field of primroses.” No, she penned “a rolling sea
of deep grass flecked with a foam of primroses.” Far more provocative than
simply a field of flowers. And those primroses don’t just lay there, they “wash
up on islands of towering…” Wow, what a picture. And why is it so visual and
impressive? The tiny details.
I
also love that paragraph’s subtly. What it doesn’t say is as effective as what
it does say. The stockade door is open, bringing company. She lets you wonder
what kind of company, and then answers it so subtlety a reader might miss the
red warning light flashing in her eyes. “A time of sunshine and peace, an open
gate and Indians.” In her next paragraph she blows that peaceful scene she
created wide open and fills it with terror and violence.
Small
details, such as the type of oak or the layout of a town, seem so infinitesimal,
commonplace and unimportant that the author might not both checking them out.
And yet, they could stand out like that flashing red light to someone who knows
they’re wrong. I read a book once by a bestselling historical author who had stately,
towering oaks growing on a ranch in Wyoming. So what? Unless the ranch owner
had those trees transplanted from Maine or somewhere back east, they are not
going to exist. The oaks in Wyoming, and other Intermountain states, do not
tower and are not stately. They’re what we call scrub oaks because they’re
scrubby, often more like bushes than trees. That error screamed at me when I
read it and my opinion of that author slid downward. She hadn’t done her
research, not all of it anyway.
In
another historical novel I read, the hero went out with his rifle, shot a
five-point stag elk, threw the carcass over his shoulder and carried it back to
camp. Anyone see the red flag here? Male elk are not called stags. Stags are
deer. Male elk are bulls. And they weigh about 500 pounds. That author’s hero
must have been Paul Bunyan to have carried so much weight on his shoulder for
miles to reach camp. I might have laughed at that boo-boo if I hadn’t found it
so annoying.
True,
most readers would probably pass right over these small errors without even
noticing them, but do we want to risk losing a fan over something so trifling?
I never bought another book by those two authors. I have bought every book
Lucia St. Clair wrote.
So
never doubt the power inherent in small details. Use them to add definition,
visual appeal, and life to your work,
life so vibrant the reader can’t turn away, only keep on turning pages until
there are no more to turn.
Growing
up in Kansas and Oklahoma during the depression and dust bowl periods, my
mother had the improbable joy of living in several dugouts.
In
my book, To Have And To Hold, I used
some of the details she told me about living in such homes to bring a little
more life to my tale.
~*~
Buck braced on his arms above her and gazed
down at her flushed face, wanting to drag the moment out. Her eyes were open,
watching him. Her hands slid down his back urging him closer.
Unfortunately,
he had hesitated too long. A strange sound intruded into his consciousness, a
scratching that seemed to come from overhead, and set the hair at his nape on
end. "What in tarnation . . . ?
Tempest went
stiff and still. "Centipedes," she whispered.
Every hair on his body prickled. "What?"
“Centipedes. The
storm’s disturbed them. They've come down out of the sod and are running around
inside the paper tacked to the ceiling."
He sat back on
his heels, staring up at the dim, candle-lit ceiling and the flimsy newspaper
that was all that kept the insects from plummeting down on them. "Judas,”
he swore. “Must be hundreds of them."
~*~
In the next instant, my characters, Buck and
Tempest, heard a loud snap overhead. They barely managed to gather up the
children and escape before the roof caved in. A pretty compelling scene, but would
it have been as alive and gripping without those centipedes? My grandfather
wouldn’t have thought so. He was terrified of them, more almost than he was of
the possibility of the roof caving in.
The next book you read, yours or someone
else’s, take note of the details and what they bring to the story. You may be
surprised.
***
Blurb:
A woman without
a prayer…
A
widow with two children, Tempest Whitney had to mortgage everything to repay
the money her husband had stolen. But even as she struggles to hold onto her
Utah homestead, a scheming rancher buys up her debts, demanding she either get
off his land or marry him. Then a dark-haired stranger shows up, claiming to be
her dead husband…
A man without a
past….
Buck
Maddux spent two years in jail for a crime he didn’t commit. Now a death bed
promise has brought him to Tempest’s dugout. A man without roots, he doesn’t
plan to stay—or to feel so fiercely protective of this feisty beauty he saves
from a forced marriage. Suddenly, Buck yearns for a home, a family, a lasting
love. But what can he offer Tempest? The surprising answer lies in the
forbidden canyons of an ancient Anasazi tribe, where fortune and danger
await—along with a passion more precious than gold.
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Charlene first serious writing attempt came in 1980 when she awoke one
morning from an unusually vivid and compelling dream. Deciding that dream
needed to be made into a book, she dug out an old portable typewriter and went
to work. That book never sold, but her second one,
Tender Touch, became a Golden Heart finalist and earned her an
agent. Soon after, she signed a three book contract with Kensington Books. Five
of Charlene's western historical romances were published between 1994 and 1999:
Taming Jenna, Tender Touch (1994 Golden Heart Finalist under the
title
Brianna),
Forever Mine
(1996 Romantic Times Magazine Reviewer's Choice Award Nominee and Affaire de
Coeur Reader/Writer Poll finalist),
To Have and To Hold Affaire de Coeur
Reader/Writer Poll finalist); and writing as Rachel Summers,
The Scent of
Roses.
Forever Mine and
Tender Touch are available as e-books
and after January 24,
To Have and To
Hold will be as well. When not writing, Charlene loves to travel, crochet,
needlepoint, research genealogy, scrapbook, and dye Ukrainian eggs.
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