Friday, June 28, 2019


Have you ever read a story that made you wonder why the author spent such a long, boring time describing an item or place that seemed of little importance to the story?

Usually when that happens, it’s because its importance will be revealed later on, or some scene will call up that particular memory or description for some reason—and its usually a pretty darn good reason!

Let’s look at Cinderella’s slipper as our first example for this. Of course, a glass slipper would be highly unusual, wouldn’t it? In fact, most likely, there would be no other slippers like that one pair!

This particular pair of shoes serves as a symbol for the entire story—improbable things happening to a young woman who has been treated so terribly for so long that lead to her ultimate happiness—it’s a story we can all relate to!

The magic that brings her happiness is not just going to the ball and all the wonderful things that happened on the way—the beautiful gown, the carriage, and so on—the true magic for Cinderella is falling in love. And how can the two lovers hope to be reunited? Well, if it weren’t for those exquisitely, perfectly-fitting glass slippers, everything else that came before—all the magic, hopes, and dreams—could have amounted to nothing at all. Everything hinges on the glass slipper fitting!

Hence the description of the slippers themselves, carrying the slipper on a pillow (which I always believed was taking a terrible chance!) and the endless search and trying on of the slipper throughout the kingdom.

The slipper is all-important because it is the proof that she is “the one” –and it has come to symbolize the very story itself. When we see a picture of the glass slipper, we know it “means” Cinderella, right?

Think about Lous L’Amour’s iconic western, Conagher. Two lonely people meet and fall in love through heartfelt notes that Evie, the heroine, writes and ties to tumbleweeds. They could be found and read by anyone—or no one at all.

But the fact that Conagher feels they speak directly to him, shows us how important what she did is to the story. This is further borne out when, in conversation with him, she uses a phrase she’s written on one of the notes—and he knows immediately it is she who has been writing them.

Loneliness and the vast emptiness of the land is a common theme throughout the book. It was unimaginable to her that Conagher would be the one who found “that note” – the one she repeated the phrase from in conversation with him—but it wasn’t impossible. And his line to her is one of the most romantic of all time, in my opinion.

He takes one of the notes out of his pocket and asks if she wrote it, and she says yes, she did. She tells him she was just so lonely she had to talk to someone, even if no one was there to hear. He says, "There was, Evie, there was me." 

The details of:

1. The land around them and their feelings about the emptiness and aloneness of where they are...
2. Evie’s acting on those feelings by just writing them down on paper and tying them to tumbleweeds...
3. The act of Evie repeating the phrase in conversation she’d used on the note Conagher found...

all add up to make this story so special and memorable—and one you will not want to put down once you start reading!

Conagher isn’t a fairy tale, but it does have its own brand of magical connections that lead to love. The details and descriptions in both of these stories, as different as they are, give the reader insights that the author, in both cases, was masterful in providing throughout the story!

Finally, another couple of tales that come to mind are two short stories many of us read in our high school English classes—The Necklace, by Guy De Maupassant, and The Gift of the Magi, by O. Henry. Do you remember these—both based on objects that were described in great detail—and the twists at the end that left you gasping in surprise?

If you haven’t read them, or even if it’s been a while, they are always good to revisit and are classic examples of why detailed descriptions of “things” can be so important to a story’s premise.

Can you think of an example in your reading where the detailed description of something had deep importance to the story?


  1. Foreshadowing is so important in a story and fun to do. At the time, only the author knows the importance of that red and white candy wrapper tossed on the saloon floor....but later, the reader will have an aha moment when she/he sees that not-so-innocent wrapper again in Book#3 of my Prairie Moon Trilogy. I always learn so much from your posts, Cheryl, and look forward to many more writing articles.

    1. Elizabeth, thanks so much for stopping by to comment. I know you are really busy right now with promoting book 2 of your wonderful Prairie Moon Trilogy, BENEATH A FUGITIVE MOON! I hope you enjoyed this--I'm having fun writing these. LOL

  2. I love Conagher! It's a book I've reread many times, as are several other of Louis L'Armour's including Crossfire Trail and Fallon. I can almost remember The Necklace, but will never forget The Gift of the Magi.

    1. I love Conagher, too, Caroline. It's one of my faves of LL's. I also loved the Sackett series and so many others of his. I got my dad started reading LL's books, and he devoured them! He loved them so much. The Gift of the Magi was wonderful, and the Necklace had such a surprise twist ending--it was a great story too!

  3. A wonderful post, Cheryl! Beautiful in its rhythm, examples and word usage.

    1. Thank you, Arletta! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I have had so much fun working on this series of posts and I've still got at least a couple more "installments" to come. Thank you for your very kind words!

  4. I am fond of those kinds of details both in what I read and write. I just wrote about my enjoyment of the little things in books-- like a heroine gardening. I very much enjoyed the movie Conagher especially since they were a real life couple

    1. I like little tidbits, too, Rain. Those things that you don't think too much about and find out that they mean something after all, or that they are just part of the person's makeup and have to do with the person they are. I loved Conagher, the movie and the book, but I always have a bit more fondness for the books, it seems, for whatever reason. There are not very many movies I give the edge to over the book, but in this case they were both very good!

  5. Sometimes those special and unique details in a story can really make a story. An unusual feather in the beginning of Sir Arthur Canon Doyle's book, THE LOST WORLD drew my attention immediately. The book was an exciting adventure unlike the movie renditions that followed.

    Those notes stuck inside tumble weeds in Conagher were the most unique details for a story I ever read. So YES! I love these details authors insert into their stories that make those stories come alive.

    Great post, Cheryl!


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